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Re: virus: i am looking for feedback on my very short story.
« Reply #2 on: 2003-02-04 12:55:20 »

I agree, too short!
Quite interesting premise...
It seems like each paragraph could be a chapter.
I would expand it and publish and rake in the dough if I were you...

Cheers and thanks!!
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Re: virus: i am looking for feedback on my very short story.
« Reply #3 on: 2003-02-04 13:33:30 »

Hi Rick,

I liked your story, but I agree with Michelle that each paragraph read one
of those chapter summaries popular in Victorian literature.

It also reminded me, I am not sure why, of the recently published online
novel called The Metamorphosis of Prime Intellect by Roger Williams
[ http://www.kuro5hin.org/prime-intellect/ ]

I think you might find it interesting.

All in all a very good effort.

Regard

Jonathan

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